endlessfuneral2003
Number of posts: 180
Localisation: Québec, Canada
Registration date: 2007-07-27
 |  Subject: No Escape  Wed Nov 21, 2007 8:53 pm | |
| New Endless Funeral lyrics for a fast thrash song (a la old Living Sacrifice) :-)
NO ESCAPE
I have faced judgment
For my offenses
I've been found guilty
on all charges
There is no escape
From this place of torment
I have brought it
Upon myself!
How could I be so blind
To the grace?
How could I take it all
For granted?
Now there is no more time
To regret
I have reaped all that
I have sown!
You see my friend
We are all condemned
We are all sinners
Driven to the slaughter
But there is a price
Our works can't suffice
Our ways are wicked
Ruin lies ahead
But there's someone who
Took the pain for us
He is God above
In the flesh
He will not ever
Force you to love Him
He lets You the choice
to decide |
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Staybrite
Number of posts: 8312
Age: 44
Localisation: Seattle
Registration date: 2007-02-08
| | Subject: Re: No Escape Wed Nov 21, 2007 11:35 pm | |
| | endlessfuneral2003 wrote: | But there's someone who
Took the pain for us
He is God above
In the flesh
He will not ever
Force you to love Him
He lets You the choice
to decide |
AMEN!!
_________________
"I used to be indecisive.......... Now I'm not sure."
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drumdude
Number of posts: 872
Age: 17
Localisation: right behind you
Registration date: 2007-04-30
| | Subject: Re: No Escape Thu Nov 22, 2007 10:38 am | |
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endlessfuneral2003
Number of posts: 180
Localisation: Québec, Canada
Registration date: 2007-07-27
| | Subject: Re: No Escape Thu Nov 22, 2007 4:42 pm | |
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alldatndensum
Admin
Number of posts: 9136
Age: 42
Localisation: Tennessee
Registration date: 2007-01-30
| | Subject: Re: No Escape Sat Nov 24, 2007 7:55 am | |
| Great words with a great message, Martin. Keep writing what God lays on your heart. Now, for some "productive criticism". Let's take a look at that last verse: | Quote: | He will not ever
Force you to love Him
He lets You the choice
to decide |
That last line sounds a little like "Engrish". You might want to word it like this:
| Quote: | He GIVES you the choice
to decide |
_________________  I might have decided, or maybe not, that I should or shouldn't, depending on the issue or non-issue, to possibly share or not share, any thoughts, opinions, or facts (that might not be deemed factual by some), due to possible fear of any misinterpretation or retribution. |
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